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Re: The Hunter
A midwinter’s night, no one’s awake. In the grass, a silent creature lies. Its presence alone makes its target quake Along with the gaze of its yellow eyes. The hunter ...
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Re: Untitled R&B
Take a look around you What do you see? I promise you always Right here’s where I’ll be Whenever you’re lonely And you need a friend Take comfort in me ...
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Re: Calm
1st stanza: if one of your verbs is going to be plural, unify the entire stanza by making all the verbs plural. Example: "the howls of anguish" instead of "the ...
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Re: Wolves (Love in the Sky)
Gold star, fellow writer. Though it is what you say (rambling), it was worth reading the entire way through. The uniformed writing, not capitalized unless absolutely necessary, was great, allowing ...
Mar 1, 2009 -
Re: The Writer's Inspiration
Sitting here at my desk, at my chair A clean sheet before me like a breath of fresh air I pick up my pen, tap my head to think A ...
Mar 1, 2009 -
Re: Pushing Me Away
Agreed with all those posted above. This topic is quite cliched, and some punctuation is needed for more flow. However, you are very into your work and have the heart ...
Mar 1, 2009 -
Re: Freestyle,Rap
I'm not that big a fan of rap music. However, unlike some rappers I've heard out there, this actually seems well written in comparison. There seems to be something missing, ...
Mar 1, 2009 -
Re: Spring Magic
Not bad. It is as good to read as it is to see the picture created in one's mind. However, I must say a few things. making me smile 'making' ...
Mar 1, 2009 -
Re: Poop Poop
Amusing, though we really need something more serious here. If you want to see something serious, check out other poems on the board, preferably the ones labeled by others as ...
Mar 1, 2009 -
Re: To the Object of My Affection
When night eclipses all you know, When darkness obscures what light should show, Know that you are in my sight And I’ll help distinguish wrong from right. My power is ...
Feb 28, 2009 -
Re: Harry Cullen & Edward Potter
Bash on Twilight! Bash on Twilight! Thank goodness you wrote that! That was really funny and relieving! There are too many Twilight fans at my school, so I practically hear ...
Feb 28, 2009 -
Re: Meep wants her money back to buy a Cheeseburger!
THAT made my day! There's too many people interested in that "Twilight" thing. As soon as it came out, that was just about the only thing I heard about from ...
Feb 28, 2009 -
Re: The Archan Chronicles - Chapter 2
Chapter 2: The Ancient Seer and Ankan Leader: Racnel woke up the next morning feeling quite refreshed from his rest. He stretched himself on the forest floor, and looked up ...
Feb 28, 2009 -
Re: “You say”
Not much religious works going around. Just a little question: aren't you ever afraid, whenever you post something like this, that someone will come and criticize you for mere subject ...
Feb 28, 2009 -
Re: Through The Eyes of a Cat
This is truly what cats do. In this short work, you have perfectly summarized the day to day events of a cat. Both of mine operate in almost the same ...
Feb 28, 2009
